专题十七 书面表达
一、
假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。
增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（^），并在其下面写出该加的词。
删除：把多余的词用斜线（\）划掉。
修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。
注意：
1.每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；
2.只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。
To make our life colorful, my classmates and I took part in a picking activity on a farm locating in the suburb of our city on last Sunday.
Upon our arrival, we were all deep attracted by that we saw. Lovely fruits, such as peaches and cherries, hang on the green branch, which made us really excited. As soon as they were divided into small groups, we worked separately. As time passed by, the activity came to end and all of us gained various fresh and tasty fruits. Tired although I was, I found it worthwhile and get close to nature could benefit us a lot.
二、
假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文, 请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误, 每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。
增加: 在缺词处加一个漏字符号(∧), 并在其下面写出该加的词。
删除: 把多余的词用斜线(\)划掉。
修改: 在错的词下画一横线, 并在该词下面写出修改后的词
注意: 1. 每处错误及其修改均仅限一词;
2. 只允许修改10处, 多者(从第11处起)不计分。
My hometown Quanzhou lies in the southeast of Fujian Province, dotting with rolling hills, valleys and basins. It's a beautiful place for people live in. Its economy has been growing rapid during the past ten years. New bridges and roads have been set up and high buildings stood in many parts of the city. A number of schools and hospitals available to people is also on the increase. So there are still some problems, such as frequent traffic jam and severe air pollution, which have a bad influence on people's daily life. Despite of these problems, I am convincing that my hometown will become more beautiful. Time permitting, you are welcome to visit them.
三、
假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文, 请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误, 每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。
增加: 在缺词处加一个漏字符号(∧), 并在其下面写出该加的词。
删除: 把多余的词用斜线(\)划掉。
修改: 在错的词下画一横线, 并在该词下面写出修改后的词。
注意:1. 每处错误及其修改均仅限一词;
2. 只允许修改10处, 多者(从第11处起)不计分。
Dear Chris,
I'm happy to hear of you. You had asked me in your last email about the student clubs in my school and the following information may give you an general idea.
Consisting of more than five thousands students, my school provides various clubs meet all tastes. Students can choose a club to join or set up a new one with the help of your teachers. The speech, photography, painting, and basketball clubs enjoys the greatest popularity. As for me, I'm a regularly member of the volleyball club, that I've learned the value of teamwork and a healthy way to face challenges in my life.
I hope the information providing is helpful.
Yours
Li Hua
四、
假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。
增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（︿），并在其下面写出该加的词。
删除：把多余的词用斜线(\)划掉。
修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。
注意：
1. 每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；
2. 只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。
Early this morning, I was riding my bike to my school while suddenly it hit a parked car. Frightening and guilty, I saw a scratch (划痕) on the car. At first, I thought about run away. But when I remembered the quality of honesty taught by my parents, I decided to do nothing better. However, I wrote a note with my apology and personal informations. Then I placed it on the window of the car and leave for my school. Surprising, in the afternoon the owner came to praise for me in front of my classmates. What unforgettable day!
五、
假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文,请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误,每句中最多有两处。错误涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。
增加:在缺词处加一个漏字符号(∧), 并在此符号下面写出该加的词。
删除:把多余的词用斜线(\)划掉。
修改: 在错的词下划一横线,并在该词下面写出修改后的词
注意:
1、每处错误及其修改均仅限一词;
2、只允许修改10处, 多者(从第11处起) 不计分。
Last Saturday was the day where No. 2 Senior High School organized a friendly football match between the students and the teachers with the intend of enriching their school life.
Bathed in the sunshine, the students from Grade Three competed over their teachers on the football field, with some other students watch the match cheerfully. Both teams were playing hard in highly spirits. The match met their expectation because he was going on wonderfully. Finally, either of the teams gets two goals.
Tiring the competition might bet it meant the lot to the students and the teachers. The thrilling game was sure to help relieve the students' intense pressure were caused by their heavy study tasks.
六、
假定你是李华,你的新西兰好友Lucy打算来中国学习中医,发邮件向你询问中医的有关情况,请你回复邮件,内容包括:
1.表示欢迎;
2. 简要介绍中医;
3. 表达祝愿。
注意:
1.词数100左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
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七、
假定你是李华，是校报的一位英文编辑，收到英国来的交换生Tony的一封求助邮件，诉说由于文化差异等原因，导致新环境适应困难，现在过得很不开心。请你以李华的名义给他回一封邮件。内容包括：
1.安慰对方
2.你的建议
3.你的祝福
注意：
1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Tony,
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Yours,
Li Hua
八、
假定你是李华，春天来了，到了放风筝的季节。为此，你的家乡在举办风筝节(the Kite Festival)。请你给你的英国交换生同学Jason发一封电子邮件，邀请他和你一起去游玩，内容包括：
1.介绍风筝节；
2.发出邀请。
注意：
1.词数100左右；
2.开头和结尾已为你写好。
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九、
北京2022年冬奥会和残奥会的主题口号是"一起向未来", 传递出了14亿中国人民的美好期待∶与世界人民携手共进、守望相助、共创美好未来。假定你是李华, 请你以"Together for a Shared Future"为题, 写一篇英文演讲稿, 参加你校举办的英语演讲比赛。内容包括∶
1. 对该口号的理解; 2. 如何响应该口号。
注意∶
1. 词数100左右, 开头结尾已给出, 不计入总词数;
2. 参考词汇∶主题口号 official motto;北京2022年冬奥会和残奥会 2022 Beijing winter Olympics and Paralympics
Dear teachers and schoolmates,
It is my honor to give a speech titled "Together for a shared future"___________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
That's all! Thank you for your listening.
十、
你校高三英文社团就“What is the most effective way to ease stress ”话题进行了一次调查，请根据下面调查结果写一篇调查报告，内容包括：
1. 简述调查结果；
2. 分析原因。
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
THE MOST EFFECTIVE WAY TO EASE STRESS
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答案以及解析
一、
答案：
To make our life colorful, my classmates and I took part in a picking activity on a farm in the suburb of our city last Sunday.
Upon our arrival, we were all attracted by we saw. Lovely fruits, such as peaches and cherries, on the green , which made us really excited. As soon as were divided into small groups, we worked separately. As time passed by, the activity came to end and all of us gained various fresh and tasty fruits. Tired I was, I found it worthwhile and close to nature could benefit us a lot.
解析：1.考查过去分词。句意:为了让我们的生活丰富多彩，上周日，我和我的同学在位于我们城市郊区的一个农场参加了采摘活动。分析可知,locate与其逻辑主语a farm之间为被动关系，所以此处应用过去分词作后置定语。故locating改为located。
2.考查固定短语。句意:为了让我们的生活丰富多彩，上周日 ，我和我的同学在位于我们城市郊区的一个农场参加了采摘活动。Last Sunday"上周日"，其前不需要加介词on。故删除last前的on。
3.考查副词。句意:到达后，我们都被眼前的景象深深吸引了。结合句意可知，此处应用副词deeply "深深地"作状语，修饰动词attracted, 表示程度深, deep作副词时，常用来表示具体的深度，不符合语境。故deep改为deeply。
4.考查宾语从句连接词。句意:到达后，我们都被眼前的景象深深吸引了。分析可知，此处引导宾语从句,从句缺少宾语,指事物，故应用连接代词what引导。故that改为what。
5.考查时态。句意:绿色的树枝上挂着桃子和樱桃等可爱的水果，这让我们非常兴奋。根据上下文可知，文章是在陈述过去的事情，应用一般过去时。故hang改为hung。
6.考查可数名词复数。句意:绿色的树枝上挂着桃子和樱桃等可爱的水果，这让我们非常兴奋。branch"树枝"为可数名词, 结合语境可知，此处应用其复数形式表示泛指。故branch改为branches。
7.考查代词。句意:我们一被分成小组就开始分开工作。结合语境及后文we可知，此处代指作者和同学们，故应用we表示"我们"。故they改为we。
8.考查冠词。句意:随着时间的流逝,活动结束了，我们都收获了各种新鲜可口的水果。come to an end"结束"，固定短语。故end前加an。
9.考查连词。句意:虽然我很累，但我觉得这是值得的，而且接近大自然会让我们受益匪浅。分析可知，句子使用了倒装结构，故应用though引导该从句，although引导让步状语从句不能用倒装。故although改为though/as。
10.考查动名词。句意:虽然我很累，但我觉得这是值得的，而且接近大自然会让我们受益匪浅。分析句子结构可知，此处应用动名词短语作主语。故get改为getting。
二、
答案：
My hometown Quanzhou lies in the southeast of Fujian Province, with rolling hills, valleys and basins. It's a beautiful place for people live in. Its economy has been growing during the past ten years. New bridges and roads have been set up and high buildings in many parts of the city. number of schools and hospitals available to people is also on the increase. there are still some problems, such as frequent traffic and severe air pollution, which have a bad influence on people's daily life. Despite these problems, I am that my hometown will become more beautiful. Time permitting, you are welcome to visit .
解析：第一处：dotting→dotted。非谓语动词错误。句子已经有谓语动词lies，故此处是非谓语动词作状语。dot在此表示"布满"，常用于被动语态，构成短语be dotted with"布满……"，由此可知，此处要用过去分词dotted。
第二处：live前加to。非谓语动词错误。此处考查不定式的复合结构"for + 宾语 + to do", 故应在live前加to。
第三处： rapid→rapidly。副词错误。修饰动词应用副词，故把rapid改为rapidly。
第四处： stood→stand。动词时态错误。此处表示现在的客观情况，应用一般现在时。
第五处： A→The。冠词错误。a number of表示"很多，大量"，其后接复数名词，谓语通常用复数；the number of表示"……的数量"，谓语动词用单数。根据句意及be动词"is"可判断，此处应用The。
第六处： So→But。连词错误。前后句之间存在语义上的转折关系，故用But。
第七处： jam→jams。名词单复数错误。jam"堵塞"是可数名词，其前的frequent暗示应用其复数形式。
第八处： 删除Despite后的of。介词错误。despite是介词，后面直接加宾语，相当于in spite of。
第九处： convincing→convinced。形容词错误。convinced"坚信，深信"，多用来形容人的感受；convincing"令人信服的"，多用来修饰物。根据语境可知，此处修饰人，应用-ed形式的形容词。
第十处： them→it。代词错误。根据语境可知，此处指代前面提到的"my hometown"，是单数概念，故应用it。
三、
答案：
I'm happy to hear you. You asked me in your last email about the student clubs in my school and the following information may give you general idea.
Consisting of more than five students, my school provides various clubs meet all tastes. Students can choose a club to join or set up a new one with the help of teachers. The speech, photography, painting, and basketball clubs the greatest popularity. As for me, I'm a member of the volleyball club, I've learned the value of teamwork and a healthy way to face challenges in my life.
I hope the information is helpful.
Yours
Li Hua
四、
答案：
Early this morning, I was riding my bike to my school suddenly it hit a parked car. and guilty, I saw a scratch (划痕) on the car. At first, I thought about away. But when I remembered the quality of honesty taught by my parents, I decided to do better. , I wrote a note with my apology and personal . Then I placed it on the window of the car and for my school. , in the afternoon the owner came to praise me in front of my classmates. What unforgettable day!
解析：这是一篇记叙文。作者讲述了在上学路上不小心擦挂了路边小车的经历， 说明诚实的重要性。
1. 考查状语从句连接词。句意：今早我正骑车去上学，突然撞上了一辆停着的小车。固定句型“be doing...when...”译为“正在做……突然……”，故将 while 改为 when。
2. 考查形容词。“frighten（使害怕；惊吓）”的形容词有 frightening（令人害怕的）与 frightened（感到害怕的，受到惊吓的）。句意：看到车子上有划痕，我既害怕又内疚，故将 Frightening 改为 Frightened.
3. 考查非谓语。句意：刚开始，逃离的念头闪现过。about 为介词，后面的动词 run 用 动名词形式 running 作宾语，故将 run 改为 running。
4. 考查不定代词。句意：很快我想起父母曾教我为人诚实，我决定将事情做得更好。故将 nothing 改为 something。
5. 考查连词。句意：因此我写了一张便条，里面有对此事的道歉和我个人信息。上文 decided to do something better 和下文 wrote a note 构成因果关系，故将 However 改为 Therefore。
6. 考查名词单复数。句意同上。information 为不可数名词，故将 informations 改为 information。
7. 考查谓语。句意：我把这张便条放在车窗上，然后离开去学校。事件发生在过去，and 并列两个谓语动词，前后一致，应用过去时态，故将故将 leave 改为 left。
8. 考查副词。句意：令我惊讶的是车主下午来当着全班同学表扬我。Surprisingly 单独 使用作状语，类似用法有“Fortunately”，“Immediately”等，故将 Surprising 改为 Surprisingly。
9. 考查介词。句意同上。此处 praise 为及物动词，直接加宾语，故去掉 praise 后的 for。
10. 考查冠词。句意：今天是一个多么难忘的一天。day 为可数名词，unforgettable 为 元音音素开头的形容词修饰 day，故在 unforgettable 前加冠词 an.
五、
答案：
Last Saturday was the day No. 2 Senior High School organized a friendly football match between the students and the teachers with the of enriching their school life.
Bathed in the sunshine, the students from Grade Three competed their teachers on the football field, with some other students the match cheerfully. Both teams were playing hard in spirits. The match met their expectation because was going on wonderfully. Finally, either of the teams two goals.
Tiring competition might bet it meant lot to the students and the teachers. The thrilling game was sure to help relieve the students' intense pressure caused by their heavy study tasks.
解析：这是一篇记叙文。讲述了在周六下午二中进行的一场师生友谊足球比赛。
1.考查定语从句。句意：上周六是第二高中组织学生和老师之间的足球友谊赛的日子，目的是丰富他们的学校生活。根据句子结构可知此处定语从句先行词是the day在定语从句中做时间状语，应使用关系副词when,故将where改为when。
2.考查名词。句意同上题。根据句子结构可知此处用作介词with的宾语应使用名词形式，故将intend改为intention。
3.考查动词短语。句意：沐浴在阳光下，三年级的学生在足球场上与老师比赛，其他一些学生则兴高采烈地观看比赛。根据句意可知是师生对抗赛，表示“和……比赛”双方是对手，应使用动词短语compete with或者compete against,故将over改为with/against。
4.考查非谓语动词。句意同上题。根据句子结构可知此处构成with复合结构， 其中宾语some other students和宾语补足语watch之间是逻辑上的主动关系，应使用现在分词形式。故将watch改为watching。
5.考查形容词。句意同第三题。根据句意可知“兴高采烈地”应使用固定短语in high spirits,此处应使用形容词修饰名词，故将highly改为high。
6.考查代词。句意：比赛符合他们的期望，因为比赛进行得很精彩。根据句意可知此处应使用动词it代指前面的match,故将he改为it。
7.考查时态。句意：最后，两支球队中的任何一支都获得两个进球。根据第一段“Last Saturday was the day where No.2 Senior High School organized a friendly football match between the students and the teachers with the intend of enriching their school life.”可知比赛时发生在过去， 应使用一般过去时。故将gets改为got。
8.考查状语从句以及倒装句。句意：尽管比赛可能很累人，但这对学生和老师来说意义重大。根据句子结构可知此处是As/Though让步状语从句的倒装句形式， 正常语序应是：As/Though the competition might be tiring，此处缺少让步状语从句引导词。故Tiring后加as/though。
9.考查冠词以及固定短语。句意同上题。根据句意可知此处表示的意思是“意义重大”，应使用短语mean a lot, 其中a lot作名词短语，表示“很多，多量”。故将the改为a。
10.考查非谓语动词。句意：这场惊心动魄的比赛肯定有助于缓解学生因繁重的学习任务而产生的巨大压力。根据句子结构可知此处动词cause作定语修饰名词pressure二者之间是逻辑上的被动关系，应使用过去分词形式。故将去掉were。
六、
答案：
Dear Lucy,
I'm so glad to know you're considering coming to China to learn traditional Chinese medicine. Here I'd like to express my warmest welcome!
Having evolved thousands of years, traditional Chinese medicine is now a common and mature healing approach which enjoys high reputation in China. Its fewer side effects and painless treatment drive many people to turn to traditional Chinese medicine when they suffer from diseases. With the worldwide spread of traditional Chinese medicine, it is now growing in popularity with foreigners.
I'm convinced that your plan is worth a try and sincerely wish you success in your study.
Yours,
Li Hua
七、
答案：
Dear Tony,
I am sorry to learn that you are having difficulty in getting used to the new school. Actually almost everyone exposed to an entirely alien environment has the same problem. [高分句型一] I'm convinced that you can manage to get over the difficulty through your effort. Perhaps the following suggestions are helpful. (安慰对方)
In most cases, the language barrier becomes a major obstacle, and thus learning the local language well is bound to make your daily life easier. What's more, it is advised to take an active part in class and after-school activities, which can help your classmates learn more about you. It's also a good idea to make friends and develop new relationships, which will surely relieve your loneliness and anxiety. [高分句型二] (你的建议)
To conclude, adaptation is a process. Just be patient, and you'll gradually enjoy yourself here .Wish to see your improvement soon. (你的祝福)
Yours,
Li Hua
解析：高分句型一: Actually almost everyone exposed to an entirely alien environment has the same problem.
译文:事实上，几乎每个暴露在完全陌生环境中的人都有同样的问题。
分析:这句话使用了过去分词短语exposed to an entirely alien environment作定语修饰everyone。
高分句型二: It's also a good idea to make friends and develop new relationships, which will surely relieve your loneliness and anxiety.
译文:交朋友和发展新关系也是一个好主意，这肯定会缓解你的孤独和焦虑。
分析:这句话使用了which引导的非限制性定语从句。
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Dear Jason,
How is everything going I am excited to tell you that the Kite Festival lasting a week is being held in my hometown. Knowing that you have a preference for flying kites, I sincerely invite you to go to the Kite Festival with me.
As is known to all, flying kites is a Chinese traditional custom and the Chinese people like flying kites. In the Kite Festival, there will be varieties of kites on display. Of course, it is great fun watching kites flying high in the sky. What is even more thrilling is that you can fly kites for yourself. I just can’t wait to enjoy the Kite Festival with you.
I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
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Dear teachers and schoolmates,
It is my honor to give a speech titled “Together for a shared future”, the official motto for 2022 Beijing winter Olympics and Paralympics, conveying Chinese people’s expectations: working hand in hand and advancing with all nations to create a beautiful future.
Facing the global challenges like COVID-19, climate change, pollution and so on, all countries have no choice but to strengthen international cooperation and build a global community with a shared future. In order to achieve this dream, everyone should try their best. As a student, if I want to make contributions to society, I should equip myself with modern knowledge. Besides, I will build up my body. As long as we humans take actions shoulder-to-shoulder, the motto will come true.
That’s all! Thank you for your listening.
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According to the pie chart, students have a variety of ways to ease their stress.
As is shown in the chart, about 40% of students choose to listen to music, while 25% of them prefer to do physical exercise to make them relaxed. Meanwhile, 18% of the students tend to surf the Internet as their recreation way when facing the hardship in the study. By comparison, there are nearly 12%, who are fond of talking to friends and 5% choose other activities to help relieve stress.
From my point of view, the reason why the majority of students accounting for almost 65% in the diagram choose more positive ways is that they focus much on their health. Students clearly concentrate on building a well-developed body so that they will make progress in their study.
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